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Into the garden on a sunny day
Little Alice went out to play
There she saw a rabbit so white
"I'm late! I'm late!" It shouts in fright
Alice ran and ran but fell into a hole
She fell down but saw not a single soul
Instead she found herself in a room
The doors in it were locked, was this her doom?
But little Alice found a way out
"Is there anyone?" Her shout
Echoes through the strange place
With a strange smirking cat which leaves no trace
Card soldiers which fear to be dead
A queen that shouts "Off with the head!"
With flamingos you play cricket
Oh please let's don't play piquet
But Alice, you should wake up from your dreams!
This isn't real, this is not as it seems!
And when Alice wakes up, she's back 
And with this the story end with a fade to black



This is a request of :iconladymoon1: and she requested me to write about Alice in Wonderland so yeah... I hope you like it
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:iconkisala10:
kisala10 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Awww voll guuuut!!! *-*
Ach Alice im Wunderland.... Schöner Film <3
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ja stimm ich zu~
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:iconkisala10:
kisala10 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hihi..
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DarkRunever Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Student General Artist
i miss the story really much <333
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww hehe :D
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:iconthe3rdsaruwatari:
the3rdsaruwatari Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013
:iconclapplz: This.. Tis is very creative.. and fun to read.. Gonna read it to my children once I have one~ :iconimhappyplz:
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol really? XD
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:iconthe3rdsaruwatari:
the3rdsaruwatari Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Yeah!!~~ The poem is shoooooooooo.. just shoo-- :iconifaintplz:
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:iconfluffyandsweet:
FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So?
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:iconthe3rdsaruwatari:
the3rdsaruwatari Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013
I can't find a word to match the awesomeness.. Hehe sorry?~ :icontinoplz:
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol cute as ever :3
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:iconthe3rdsaruwatari:
the3rdsaruwatari Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013
Ah Nici-san~ But I think sumone with such imagination is much more cuterrhh!!~ :iconcblushplz:
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:iconfluffyandsweet:
FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Urgh
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You rhyme so well but do give more attention to rhythm, or cadence, that is if you really want to become a serious poet. You certainly have potential. For example, you have ten beats in line one, eight in line two.  Since these two end in rhyming words the beats should be the same. An easy fix would simply be to change line 2 to read: little Alice went out to run and play.  On easy way to judge rhythm is to say the verses out loud. If it doesn't sound quite right, consider how a simple change might make it better.  Of course, if you are not trying to be a serious poet the above counsel is moot. Keep up the good work 
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the critique, but poetry in my country is nearly forgotten so there's no point in trying to become a serious poet. There's also just the fire friends that read my poems, it also was only a hobby and it'll stay like that. But I will keep in mind what you said
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I see. well dear nici it's certainly not forgotten here on dA
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
that's true Tom^^
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SilverSkylightMoon Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very cute~ i always loved that story~
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much ^^
At least you and your sister pay attention…
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TwilightTears446 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist
:iconblushplz: I always loved that movie, beautiful work!! XD
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww thsnkies :3
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:iconladymoon1:
LADYMOON1 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ohhh!!! :heart:
Again you amaze me with your writing! It was fabulous! And really described the story well! :heart:
Thank you!!! :D :D 
I said I would give you a free drawing in return for your kindness. Please contact me via note. ^^
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You did? I can't remember that ^^; bit I'm happy you like it^^
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:iconladymoon1:
LADYMOON1 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah did you not get my note I sent you? :(
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:iconfluffyandsweet:
FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No sorry I didn't get a note :(
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:iconladymoon1:
LADYMOON1 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww sweetie :( Well my offer still stands! :D
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks but I have no idea what I should request you nor do I need any free drawings^^; I only want to hear that you like it~
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LADYMOON1 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Of course I like it!! ^^
Oh I see honey well if you ever have anything in mind I never go back on my word. ^^ Just thought I'd be nice~
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FluffyAndSweet Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sometimes I really hate that I can't decide what to request… it's always like that ^^; but I'm really glad you asked me
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